Comments on: Running Naked in Public

By: Dee

Dee — Fri, 16 May 2008 01:43:27 +0000

Marnee, I’ve written a couple of love scenes and one or two sex scenes. This is my advice: forget about yourself. Don’t think about “What do I do?” or “What do people think about when they ‘do’ it?” Instead, stop thinking and just feel. More emotion and less logic. More fantasy and less reality. This is fiction so go for what you want life to be instead of what it is. (Often. Unfortunately.)

Suppose some woman sat beside a man she wanted to be with on the sofa. What would she like him to say? To do? If he touched her hand, what might she feel? Would she shiver at his fingers on hers or want to pull away (in which case, you’ve got a really, really short sex scene). Does he wear a scent? If so, is it something that she likes? Does she want to lean closer to take more in with each breath? Would she want to see his body? Touch his body? Taste his body? Have her emote those wishes.

Same with the guy–they do have fears and desires beyond the strictly physical, despite much evidence to the contrary.

Don’t worry about Tab A fitting into Slot B. Women are turned on by emotion and fantasies first. Work on that part of the scene and I’ll bet the physical falls into place.

Just my two cent’s worth!

By: Quantum

Quantum — Thu, 15 May 2008 19:47:51 +0000

Crumbs, I think I’m starting to blush just thinking of Haleigh’s tale.

Don’t worry Marnee…we can’t all be mathematicians. I do hope I’m not getting kinky though.I rather like the idea of the heroine spouting algebra at the climax….I can understand that.*g*

Terri, If I should ever attend an American Romance Conference I will definitely invite you along as my translator

By: Sin

Sin — Thu, 15 May 2008 19:37:19 +0000

Q- did you suggest we use our heads more during the moment? *grin*

By: Sin

Sin — Thu, 15 May 2008 19:36:21 +0000

Hal, you’re a ball buster.

By: haleigh

haleigh — Thu, 15 May 2008 18:52:26 +0000

Wait, they may not be good in bed together? Oh crap.

I’m at the first full sex scene, and I’m having all the same hesitations you are, Marnee. They’ve almost had sex twice before - as in, he has her half naked and his hands down her pants and they’re interrupted. I think if I stop them again my hero might just rebel entirely. Poor guy.

By: Marnee Jo

Marnee Jo — Thu, 15 May 2008 17:43:26 +0000

Lis - I think writing and connecting with our characters is a book long process. I’m sure you’re doing great.

Ter - see? I’m an English major. I get confused when letters mean things beyond letters.

*sigh* sorry, Q.

By: terrio

terrio — Thu, 15 May 2008 17:33:03 +0000

Marnee - I think Q was trying to say solve for X and you’ll find your answer. *g*

Terrio - thumbing through her Quantum to English dictionary.

By: Lisa

Lisa — Thu, 15 May 2008 17:32:46 +0000

I have written lots of sex scenes. It’s not my favorite thing to write, but sometimes I enjoy writing a smoking hot, set the bed on fire scene.

Writing and connecting with my characters is giving me the most trouble at the present time.

By: Marnee Jo

Marnee Jo — Thu, 15 May 2008 17:18:26 +0000

Janga - I think that’s a good thing to remember, the circumstances surrounding each one is unique and should be dealt with as such.

Now, I just have to figure out the nuances of the circumstances and Viola, love scene.

Q - thanks for your input, though I doubt my heroine or hero spouting algebra in the love scene would be appropriate. Maybe some other hero…. *writing that in my notes for later use*

By: Marnee Jo

Marnee Jo — Thu, 15 May 2008 17:16:01 +0000

Ter - It is her first time, not his obviously as he’s widowered. But, that’s another aspect I want to get right. The whole, I’ve never done this before balanced with the I’m a superwitch with a healthy dose of, I know you don’t really want to marry me.

Sheesh.